Not Bad
The vocals sometimes seem a little whack melodically - like where you do the light choral singing. The screams are actually pretty cool, I like the effects you put on the voice. The audio quality for the entire piece could've been a lot better, though.
I'm into melodic death metal. So, to hear the audio quality of the drums sound drowned out kinda turned me off. I couldn't even make out the bass kicks.
I liked the melodic rhythm section at 1:53-2:08. I felt that stood out as one of the best sections. The soloing was... hmmm... just didn't seem to do it for me.